blackbird12

Hmm, this is really too short to even give it a full review. Basically this could use some good proofreading because there are a lot of missing commas and misspellings ...

Nice work overall! I like the idea of the secret, and how you've used descriptive language to make that idea even more vivid. However, you have a few issues with ...

Hey there! I like the idea behind this poem is pretty good but my issues with it all stem back to the same problem: rhyming. For one thing, a few ...

I agree with Elinor that the repetition of "patterpitterpatter" does somewhat clash with the beauty and tenderness of the moment by interrupting the other lines. Also, the rhythm of this ...

This is a short, sweet, enjoyable poem. Nice work overall. I just have a few nitpicks... The times cried, And the times shared. I think you mean "The times we ...

I liked this poem a lot! Very nice turns of phrase and while the subject matter is obviously heavy, I think you handled it delicately. The second line of the ...

Now, I am sitting here, crouched in a little ball, surrounded with blood and veins. Normally, the phrase is "surrounded by." Her water finally breaks out . "Out" is unnecessary ...

I also enjoyed reading this very much. Sounds like there's a poet inside you waiting to come out! I must agree with what was said earlier about rhyme schemes. It ...

Hey there! Much was covered in the previous critique, but I do have a few quibbles of my own. I'll get right to it. Some mechanism in his mind had ...

Overall, I enjoyed this poem. The content is haunting and resonant--I believe that everyone can relate to this idea that you have written here, how we all at one time ...

My cane of white clatters against cavities in the concrete and threads through these city streets like my fingers through your scalp on a cool Sunday night. Very nice beginning ...

Nice work, for the most part. I like the second stanza the most. One thing I believe you should watch out for the use of punctuation, in this case commas. ...

I very much enjoyed this poem also. I really like the title--it captured my interest. I also like the flow of this piece, you have some very good word choice ...

Hmmm this poem has a very cynical view of today's society, but it is unfortunately an accurate view. They say that art always somehow reflects the society in which it ...