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I love the title. I also love the poem and I think it is a credit to you that by the time I'd finished reading I was thinking about how ...

I read poems becuase they can be beautiful in a way that prose cannot. They sort of capture a feeling and then set it free in words. If that makes ...

This was good. I wear a black glittering mask; made of glass. I hide and you seek, your out to hurt me. 1) You're not your 2) I think you've ...

This is so great - did you learn about stuff like the switching of socks in school, or did you find it out somewhere else? Well anyway, it works really ...

I like the original version better. I think that you could have done much better - I'm not sure that you've done justice to yourself as a writer in creating ...

This is okay, I guess. I agree that the rhyming seems forced, and I think you should drop it - especially as you just change your rhyming scheme for the ...

I'm sorry but I don't think that this 're-make' is as good as the original piece. Obviously that one needed work, but this one simply doesn't come across as well. ...

This is good, but I'm just wondering - in part two are your characters less accepting of the fact that they're going to die? Because Charlotte and Ryan just seem ...

Love it. Can't go into the same detail as I did for the last chapter, but I'm sure you can pick anything up yourself if you just read it through. ...

I like your style. It's very chatty and informal, which helps to engage your reader. The story's good, but I'm afraid that you've made a few mistakes. Felicia, or Fliss ...

Hi newbie! Nice to meet you! This is a really good piece of work, but you've made one or two mistakes - but hey! So do we all! So I'm ...

I prefer the original poem to the rewrite - somehow the rewrite just seems wrong . Sometimes you feel like you’re so out of place, you wanted a homerun… but ...

I like it - it has the makings of a good book. The major problem you have is that you seem to repeat yourself quite a lot. For example you ...

This is really good. I suppose I'm a little biased though - I can find so few people to agree with me that winter is the most beautiful season. I ...

Your stuff is good and you shouldn't be afraid to post more - how else are you going to improve? But I do think you should try writing this from ...