bella4lifevur

Well you'll get it later I want rewrite most of my chapters and turn it into like i'm narriating it. So it will be 3rd person and If you still ...

Okay thanks for your honest opinion. And when you think something shouldn't be there you'll get it later in the book. So remember something that doesn't make sense now. Makes ...

Well In my book Like the Getting in my car felt like I was going to die or be reborn at that moment. Goes with the “You gave us a ...

I'm still enjoying it. but you need to be careful when typing you spell somethings wrong sometimes. Other wise on to your next chapter

I enjoyed it, it was showing a point. I liked it

Thanks I'll take your tips. And Sorry about the ___(n) My friend has a good name and wants me to use it so I put that until she found it.

I enjoyed it. You were very creative. and the way you write through me off at first because it's different then the way I'm writing my book. However; I got ...

Well I enjoyed it even thought I don't really like Spring but your A,B,A,B C,D,C,D E,E. You did a nice job

I thought is was hooking the reader the whole time. Also, nice wording.

I watch the sky Roll over me And feel the ground Move under me I enjoyed this part especially. Of what you mean. It was very outgoing

I felt your passion and what i think you thought when writing this. As a summer's love Crumbles in the wind Very... creative... shows you are out not cramped in ...

I felt you put work in it I saw nothing like big wrong with it. Change things if you want but I like it the way it is.

I loved it. You have such passion however; remember not to change from 3rd person to 1st person sometimes.