beginningtowrite

As was mentioned previously the story was a bit lacking. I didn't personally think there was enough in here for it to be classified as a whole chapter, perhaps write ...

Just like the other chapters this was great! I do have a few things I want to point out however. Firstly; I think that some of the dialogue seems a ...

This was good, most of the mistakes I found have already been pointed out. As was previously mentioned you need to change some of the words over like Alec for ...

This is great! I will admit I did get goose bumps haha. I found one or two grammatical/spelling errors. One the third day I had opened my eyes to feel ...

This was good, but again it needs some touching up. You are saying things almost too matter-of-factly. Like if someone told me I was a vampire I'd laugh and wouldn't ...

This was a good first chapter, but like the others said there are a few grammar issues that need to be worked out. “Kayla” Ryan began, but he couldn’t find ...

Again this is absolutely amazing! You're attention to detail never fails to amaze me. I did, however, find some spelling/grammar issues. I glance back over my shoulder only once, and ...

All I can really say is wow. To be totally honest I read the plot/synopsis and was sceptical about reading it, but I am so glad I decided to. The ...

Again this is great! I couldn't really find anything wrong with it to be honest, just keep up the good work! Looking forward to reading chapter three when you've written ...

Just a quick thing i noticed: The iron barred doors clanked shut, and the guard told me I would not be receiving any rations for the next two days for ...

This is absolutely amazing! One thing though: She quickly step sided them and sent her own attack back. I don't know whether you wrote it like this because of where ...

I know this is just a prologue, but I think some touching up could be done. Don't get me wrong, it was interesting and I will enjoy reading the rest ...

This was amazing, it was right out there when it comes to fantasy. My only criticism is that in the first couple of paragraphs I think you may have over-used ...

This sounds like a great idea! One section that confused me a slight bit though was: After a year of that terrible night , her stepfather decides to move the ...

This was amazing! I am also aiming to write a story about fallen angels, although mine is different. I love the fact that already this has left me wanting to ...