barefootrunner

This was written in a particularly condensed, personal style of writing, which I found very interesting, if sometimes overly descriptive. There were no superfluous adjectives, though, and the grammar

Awwwh! This is so cute! You also have practically no grammar mistakes, so I'll just suggest "more suitable" phrases in a few places. I love the wolf, I love Cheyne, ...

You couldn't have put it better! There seems to be one grammar error, though. I'm not sure if you meant it to be that way, but "mom jeans" might really ...

Good! I seem to sense some form of trouble brewing... What will happen next? The girls were interacting wonderfully, but I still can't quite figure out their individual characters. Try ...

Now that is scary. I loved it. The grammar was a bit jumbled, though, so let's sort that out first. If I'm very harsh, allow me to apologise: I don't ...

It's a lovely poem. It delves into a deep, stirring problem. This is mirrored by its subdued tone. There were a few grammos and typos: When your mopping a quiet ...

Nice poem! At first the rhyme in every line irritated me -- it felt as though the words were chosen solely for their rhyming value, they sounded forced, unnatural and ...

You must know, before I even start, that I am not a great poet and my opinions stay opinions and not rules. Firstly, grammar: Your deep green eyes beckons me ...

I agree with storyweaver. Maybe some rhyme or meter would do the poem good. Don't get me wrong -- I have nothing against free verse, but free verse is a ...

Ooooh! Great stuff! Now it is all revealed! I absolutely love this novel, it's a great Red Riding Hood story that doesn't shove it in your face. The grammar was ...

Right. First encounter between identical twins. The slight stagnation was great; one should linger on this topic. I am going to red-marker this one again to pick out grammar errors ...

Hi there! Yes, I'm back! Your grammar was great, the control over the topic was fantastic, I have one grammar bone to pick with you -- My Mama wouldn't do ...

Nice feeling of quiet menace here. You leave the readers with an "oh my word what is he doing there" feeling about Rice, but I must warn -- beware of ...

Oh, bliss! You have fabulous grammar, perfect control over the topic and a biting ending. I like your style, it feels distilled and well-edited. You took a long time to ...

I'm back and ready with another flood of positively draconian criticism! :) Here are some typos and grammos: The memories, the memories. That full stop must be a comma. Susan ...