barefootrunner

Hi there! barefootrunner here to review! I think Searria got most of the grammar nitpicks, so I'll focus more on storyline, characters and plot. Plot: Woah, there! You certainly waisted ...

Hi there! barefootrunner here to review your piece! Firstly, grammar nitpicks: Your grammar was really good, but here are a few flaws: 'Everything she did, everything she spoke would seem ...

Hi there! I really loved the title of this poem, and it really drew me in, so here I am, reviewing your work! I really loved this poem. I has ...

Hi there and welcome! barefootrunner here to review. Firstly, I was in need of a break and when I read this piece, you gave me one. This is something that ...

Hi there, TheSparrowsAnd! Welcome to YWS! This was a fascinating piece of writing here and really enjoyed it, but there were a few things that detracted from it. Firstly, the ...

Hi there! This was quite an interesting piece, and quite well done! I think, firstly, that you should use some way to isolate thoughts, like italics, because the thoughts voiced ...

Hi there, Rosan! barefootrunner here with a short review for a short poem. Title: Concise and precise, like the poem. Lineation and stanzas: Good. Very short, sharp and blocked. It ...

Hi there, Annapurna! Welcome to YWS! I've got a big fat review for you :) I really did a thorough nitpick here, so I take the opportunity here to praise ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! I'm going to do the same as your other reviewers and say that this is really, really similar to the Hunger Games, but with a ...

Hi there! Well done with this piece! I reviewed the previous one and I really love your humour and light, conversational tone. I wish I could make this longer with ...

Hi there, Trident! Welcome to YWS! Spelling and Grammar: There were very few infractions here. Perhaps one or two, but nothing major. You have perfect dialogue, comma usage, all the ...

Hi there, inkwell! I read this poem and was amazed. It's full of great visuals and really beautiful metaphors. You've really used your language with power, and it's good to ...

Hi there, illitar, and welcome to YWS! This was a very interesting chapter, and I really like the story. Spelling and Grammar: You need some work here. You are depriving ...

Hi there! Another review for you! Good, here you are getting into it. I really like how you chose to explain it, so it doesn't all turn into a huge ...

Hi there! It's me with another review! This chapter was a big improvement. This is more the sort of thing that your writing style is suited to -- tension and ...