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Re: Soaps, ropes, popes.
Hello! This was so funny and...random, but I loved it! Your rhyming was nice. It was just really short, but I know it was just for fun. Great job. Sorry ...
Jun 27, 2011 -
Re: The F.U.N. Song.
Haha! This was great. It was so funny and written creatively. Great job.
Jun 3, 2011 -
Re: You died, tonight.
Hello! This was good. It was serious, heart-felt and emotion with a nice humorous touch at the end. It was very well written. Great job.
Jan 8, 2011 -
Re: 101 Things I Want to Do before I Die
This was nice and inspiring. I loved it and did in fact read it. There is really nothing to critique, being because it is not really a formal piece. It ...
Jan 8, 2011 -
Re: Till Death Do Us Apart-(Prologue)
Hello! This was nicely written. I love the theme here. It is so sad but sweet at the same time. It is very relateable. I loved the first paragraph. It ...
Oct 24, 2010 -
Re: The Smile
Hello! This was so cute and happy. I loved it. The metaphors and personification are wonderful. The word choice and rhythm are nice. The flow was nicely done. Great job! ...
Oct 23, 2010 -
Re: Mist (redone)
Wow! That is wonderful. I love the different phrases that you use to describe the mist. I could see it all clearly. Great imagery. Keep it up! ~Ballerina
Oct 22, 2010 -
Re: The Sea Contemplates the Moon
Hello! And welcome to YWS. Alright, so this was nice. I loved the imagery and descriptions that you had in it. The poem was deep and full of emotion. It ...
Oct 22, 2010 -
Re: My Life's a Fairytale
Hello! This was wonderful. It is so charming and cute! I love the storybook feel to it. The lyrics are so meaningful and deep. As far as grammar goes, there ...
Oct 20, 2010 -
Re: See No Evil, Hear No Evil, Feel No Evil
This was wonderful. The flow, the rhyme and the depth was all there. I don't really know what else to say. Great Job.
Oct 20, 2010 -
Re: Just give it some time
Hi! This has such a strong message. I am sure every teenager can relate to this. There is so much emotion and depth to your poem. The flow was nice. ...
Sep 26, 2010 -
Re: Today is one of those days - edited
This was nice. I could see the scene perfectly. I loved the flow and word choice that you used. It was a calming and sweet poem. Great job! :D
Jun 15, 2010 -
Re: Determined: The Story of a Beautiful Jew. Chapter Three.
Hi! I really enjoy this. I love how you have developed your MC. She has a great foundation. Maybe elaborate on the parents and brother a little more. You describe ...
Jan 31, 2010 -
Re: "Glee" fanfic - "Material Girl"
This was...interesting. The concept was new. You portrayed the character of Kirk well. I feel that you could have described things more though. But besides that it was good.
Jan 3, 2010 -
Re: Song of the Sparrow
Oh yes. I read that book. I really enjoyed it. The concept of having it in a poem form was refreshing. The plot of the story was interesting. I enjoyed ...
Dec 31, 2009