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Lovely poem. little seeds that grew into fruits that tasted like the music that the wind always brought her, and flowers whose petals could be opened; This is an awkward ...

Hey arianaSarroyo , how are you? Really glad you're sharing your work with us, it's always lovely to have people share things that come from the heart. There are some ...

Yes, excellent! What a joy to read something with some real skill and grit, as it were! My critiquing skills are really rusty, bear with me. I'm not certain whether ...

Interesting. I'm impressed. There's one thing in particular I would suggest, if you're planning an edit/rewrite - the structure and the style of your story, this compressed constant river of ...

Hello there. Let's be seeing what we can be doing with this one! First off: this Here's a poem if you read my blog...you would know, and its true is ...

Tact is over-rated. It just causes you to use an unnecessary amount of fluff to say something half as effectively as you might otherwise have done. Lex has covered the ...

Hmm. I'm impressed. It's not perfect, but as a writer you have some very positive [and rare!] strong points which I'm absolutely delighted to see - you're capable of using ...

I'm with the bubblemeister on this one - I had real trouble getting ahold of the rhythm, and I am pretty familiar with ragtime. I think I can almost grasp ...

Don't spell day wrong, it's bad for our health. Abstract, yes. Communicative... not so much. Original? Also, unfortunately, not so much. You go on for a while about day and ...

Whew, that's a piece and a half. You don't see a lot of epic poems around, I'm impressed to find people still attempting them. You have a couple of problems. ...

Very interesting indeed, I am impressed. I agree with June about your choice of style - I'm not always a fan of lowercase poetry [though lots of people seem to ...

Mmm, I'm impressed, a very worthy effort! I struggle to become emotionally involved in most of the political [broadly political, that is, not necessarily party-political] poetry I read, the majority ...

Interesting, it's a very earthy poem - smells of the dark and the dank, I like the style. Very evocative of Heaney to my mind. The world burrows its arms ...

Well hello there evanrith , it's always nice to see someone taking an slightly deeper interest in their poetry, not just the nuts-and-bolts technicalities, it's very important. I have a ...

Nope Vernon, Heidi's right - "incandescence" is a noun, the adjective of which is "incandescent." So you would say, "followed by muffled rumblings and bright incandescent flashes." You would use ...