averianmariej

Way good poem! The rhyming is really good, and it is definitely a cool message. JUst a few switchups, though. This heaven is a prison With jail cells of white. ...

I really liked your poem! But I have a few questions. Who is it you are supposedly talking to? That is a major thing I would like addressed. There are ...

You wrote a really great poem! I like it alot. There isn't a whole lot I would hcange, but just one or two things. The raging waves flow higher. The ...

I really like your poem! It is great :D I have just a few suggestions Like the moon cannot rise until the sun has set, A heart cannot mend until ...

First Off, I'd like to say I really liked this poem, although it could use a few change-ups. Here are some of my suggestions. They will be in italics. -------------------------------------------------

Okay, I liked the beginning of your story, but it could use a few touch ups. For now, I will put my changes in italics. Chapter 1: Into the mystery. ...

wow! i totally loved your story! :D it was great! I've had so many love dreams like that! i wish it had more detail as to were you where and ...