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I liked this. It explains what God is, why yoiu believe in him and what he does. I think you might get a placing for that (but.. you have to... ...

I like it! I have a friend who's father is away a lot, and her mother drinks, and... She told me today that her mother had stopped, so it seems ...

Haha... thanks for the review! I'll work on it!

Thanks for the review, Crouching Tuna. I do think that you had some odd corrections there, mixing up the tenses. The entire story is supposed to be in past tense, ...

Ok so, lets review this story. I think you obviously know what I'm going to point out first. The first three chapters, what was up with those? I don't mean ...

I love it. I really can't get a conversation going in my writing, and you do it so well... I'm looking forwards to the rest of the experiments!

Okay, this is long. i have to come bact tomorrow and review, but I will get there. Sorry for the wait!

I'm not sure I like the whole build up and then a miss, but as a bit of flash fiction, I guess it's fair. :) Yeah, I suppose it was ...

Everyone seems to have beat me to it, but I'll say this: When you two main characters are in their granfathers attic, or whatever it was, you should make it ...

Hi, I've made some changes to grammar, so I'll save it in a word doc. and attatch it. I'll go over the story again soon, and tell youm what parts ...

THANK YOU! I really appreaciate it. I dont really read over the things I put on my blog, but now I realize how many mistakes I can make! Thanks... and ...

However, there is hope. There is a chance for us to change. Less drastically than I would hope Well, you shouldn't use 'hope' hjere twice... it brings it down. I ...

Okay, back for review No. 2! First of all, some general comments as I read through... :arrow: You over-do the description in the first couple of paragraphs, just a little ...

Okay... I'm back! Characters: You say that Tristan is a boy... I really had no idea! You need to make it obvious, spout some names of his friends, or, if ...

Yeah, I've read Anthony Horowitz. Him and Scott Westerfeld are great authors. I've reserved the hunger games from my local library, and it seems good. What actually defines 'established critical ...