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Thanks guys! have changed it around a bit.

Thank you, fixed up what you said. Reviews still open

Thank you, Anyone else??

Did all of that come from renovations? I somehow don't believe that, sorry I didn't read the others reviews, but you need to go and read over this again, some ...

nice work... onto the next one now!

Hello, again, this was pretty good for a romance! EUGH. a cant see any other mistakes than those that have already been pointed out. Good work

Nice work there! is the entire story going to be told in the two views? that was a good introduction to both of the characters. I don't usually read romance, ...

Hello, can someone please review this???!? I'm getting desperate!

Awesomely written. great and captivating first sentence, some backstabbing/i meant trickery in the end... all of my nitpicks were already taken... Good work!

Any reviews... NOTHING?!?? can I at least get some answers to my pol then?? Appreciated :P

Yeah, that really helped, thanks :). It didn't sound harsh to me at all. I know I always mix up the tenses, and so I went over it again, but ...

well, I liked it, but it was no way near the sheer awesomeness of the first three. I wouldn't recommend reading it if you love the series as it is, ...

Thanks alot you two, they were helpfull critiques!

I'll give you a hint: It begins with "E" and I can't say it. alwaysawriter: Twiight is awesome, and thats coming from someone who hates romance, anyway, the writing doesn't ...

" Y eah kind of . Y ou should see my sisters best friend s' family, now that's big" Changes in bold. Y eah sure Jake thought, but he didn't ...