ashleylee

Short, but to the point. This was good, Merry. You had all the passions right and everything. It looked good. I do have some stuff to point out, however. The ...

Good, I liked the length :wink: But I do felt it was kind of rushed. For example: To leave or not to leave, that is the question...? Cain’s exit was ...

Okay, Merry, you continued down the right path with your story. I really enjoy how ever chapter is opposite. You post one of the past and then one of the ...

Wow, I think Dani is going insane! I mean, it sure seems like it…or my other thought was maybe you are trying to protray thoughts of sucide and other such ...

Hey, Dommy65! I am so sorry that I haven't gotten to this sooner...I just guess I spaced or something...but anyway, here I am and I am ready to review! :D ...

Very comical ending. I fit the chapter to a T. But I must say, I felt like you skipped out on some important information, like the thoughts of Jess. You ...

Can you say crrreeeppyy??? I can't imagine how I would react to that if someone said that to me! But anyway, back to your story... I see that everyone basically ...

This was good! :D Description, plot and everything else is coming together for you. I did notice you missed a few commas but I'm in a hurry so I can't ...

I think you are trying to use, like sofi said, a piece of paper and smuging it to somehow describe the confusing and sometimes complicated place of the universe. I ...

Wow! That is one messed up case! I mean, everybody involved basically could have done it! That’s crazy how you involved all of them. Nice job! I really found nothing ...

I found this story to be really quite adorable, especially the ending. Now, before I go into more, I’ll do individual stuff first. As we settle into the huge beanbag ...

Hey, Brianna! Okay, I did notice a few things in your edited post: Adam sat down in the chair and we bound him to the chair. You say "chair" twice. ...

Okay, I found that you have a pretty solid plot going. But let me get the individual stuff out of the way first: I was there outside on the porch ...

Too short for my taste...but I guess that's just me. It was the eve of the masquerade party and everything was going according to plan. I was dancing around with ...

Hey, Scasha! I saw you had a new story out and decided to check it out… She managed to make it half-way across the small campus field before it started ...