aquababe

First off, it sounds interesting. In this review I’m not trying to sound absolutly negative. I want to give you some criticism that could actually help your work. The first ...

Ok, you successfully captured my attention. Good job. I just have a couple of little nitpicks (one of them already mentioned), but otherwise it was great. You kind of lost ...

That was great. I'm afraid that I'm saying what has been said before, but the rhymes were confusing. Other than that, you were great. I love the title, and the ...

Very good. THere was only one spelling error that I could find. . I run back on defense and follow the ball. It should be spelled defence. Overall you did ...

I liked it. Boolovesyou got pretty much everything, but I want to put some emphasis on one of his comments. When I look to my right I see a cloud, ...

It's a cute, fun poem to read. It's reletively simple, yet still entertaining. Most of the things that could/should be changed have been mentioned allready, but I do have to ...

WOW. That was great. Some of the rhymes might have seemed forced, but it was still awesome. I haven't been here that long, but suicide poems seem to be a ...

Good job. I enjoyed it, and it was nearly entirely free of small knit picks. You went over it pretty well before posting it here I'd guess. :D I mean, ...

I like you're writing style, and I'm okay with the story. I don't agree with the view of drugs ot all, but the writing itself was pretty good. I'm just ...

Good job. I liked the idea, and I liked the way you comunicated it. There's not really anything I can say that others haven't commented on. It did seem rushed, ...

Ok, I really liked this idea. You did pretty good, but some of the rhymes were...forced. I have to agree with springs616. Your descriptions were good, and you did well. ...

It looks pretty good. I wish I could hear the tune, but it does seem like there's a rythym to it. You use alot of good description that makes it ...

I cant really say anything that BenFranks didn't allready say. I agree that you should've used shorter sentences. One of yours managed to take up four lines. In places like, ...

I've been enjoying your book so far. It's pretty good. I'll definately continue reading. The one thing I've really noticed is that you've switched a few times between past and ...

Chapter 1: 2 thousand years later. After a long 2thousand years, soon to be called the Dark Ages, there was a Nymph girl, of the name Deborah. She was a ...