antimelrose

Ciao! I liked the simple, but sweet language you wrote this in. I have very few objections, namely the title: it comes across as ironic. Shrill is high–pitch and often ...

Well... first off, you misspelled "their" in the second line. And your meter is a bit odd in places; try to keep your sentences even. Yes, this means having to ...

Well, it's decent. I'd say that it really only started to weaken towards the end. When you mention the "horrified" crowd, it doesn't feel effective because you had to tell ...

Wow. This was fascinating to read, enigmatic and provocative to the imagination. I think you have a great start, but I think you should tweak a few places. Comments: 1) ...

I gave it a "like it" because your imagery was excellent: it really came across as vivid, not mental gymnastics to imagine, but still beautifully creative and surprising at the ...

Well... there were some awkward moments. It was interesting, certainly, but I don't think it needed to be so heavily peppered with cliches as it did. That first line? Dancing ...

Greetings, salutations, a voice shouting hello: This was interesting. "Sixteen Winters" had a dry (in the positive way, not saturated with glib words), eloquent aura that really felt refreshing to ...

Both poems have fantastic descriptions, reminiscent of Faulkner with his imagery that is so vivid in the mind. I do, however, agree with Pantalid's comment about how you give us ...

Hello! I'd like to begin by saying that in terms of quality, this was decent. I didn't see any missing elements (for example, descriptions without an idea), and it wasn't ...

This was very good. What I liked the most was even though "suicidal ideation" was saturated with descriptions, they are not the static sort, not at all still life. These ...

I agree with Kamas: you need a bit more of an idea to drive the poem. In short, what is its point? You have a lot of potential here, with ...

Okay. The poem was fairly decent, at least in terms of vocabulary choice and rhyme scheme/meter. However, the theme "disease of the self", though explored in interesting, intricate phrases, never ...

Aww, it was so sweet! This shall be a brief review (homework, argh!), but the two nice lines, "worlds and websites" (euphonious, even better) and "black text and electronic light" ...

I really enjoyed reading this. The cold, crisp descriptions were quite nice; I also found it interesting that you ended the poem with a final, brief line about the city, ...

Well, your little explanation blurb at the beginning kind of gave it away, but the suspense was still strong. "Hope you like it!" is awkward when the poem is about ...