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Mostly I'm just absurdly excited that you wrote a poem about Gregor Mendel. You definitely have beautiful images, as has been mentioned, and I also loved many of the small ...

I love the way you said so much in so few words. It feels complete and doesn't force you to realize it's a haiku, it just kind of is. Does ...

drag ravaged twilight behind my eyes. O sugar cube, "Oh sugar cube" jumped out at me as strange and out of place. It sounds like, I don't know, something sappy ...

Well, it is teen depression. But much prettier than most. And the last line (which I loved) seemed to make it something more... [admittedly fractal] is nicely worded but seems ...

Towards the end it started to sound like a cheerleader's chant. But maybe that's just me :) The 'no' questions got a little repetetive, but you do have some really ...

I loved this, especially Hush. Your wishes aren't true. and Hansel and Hitler start a coin collection in your footsteps, and whistle the candle black and plunge us all into ...

Wow. This has the most amazing imagery, dark and beautiful. Especially, don’t let me die in silence. cut me open, let the bright freshness of my blood submerge the white ...

I really like this. There's some really great descriptions, and you did a good job of describing your emotions without getting whiny or angsty. giving my tongue courage and my ...

It was all an economy of thin. Nice opening. And a great line, even on its own. and forever leave me – broken to dust and ashes, I, to grind ...

I really liked this. Reading it I got a sense of smething deeper kind of hiding underneath, that I could see now and again. Of course maybe it only seems ...

Afraid I will awake to find, the window open and my youth gone— stolen during the night. I love these lines. But the friends that replaced them— in reality, Remain ...

the only difference between love and obsession is the quality of the threads that hold dual world abreast - Awesome beginning, beautiful image. whether when struck they symphonically sing or ...

Wow. This is so amazingly apt and... good. I love the stark image and the deadpan tone of this. to drop bombs on breakfast tables I'd change 'to drop' to ...

I liked this too. It's kind of... unpolished, and I mean that in the best possible way. It doesn't need to be amazingly poetical because it's so heartfelt and true. ...

Beautiful. I love the prose-ish quality of this, it flows so well and is very nice to read. And all your wonderful images... (not that it's always so beautiful) I'd ...