Young Writers Society

Do we sing?
No.

What is our song?
The words that form the worlds.

I like it. I kept imagining little elves writing in big books, like the shoemaker's elves only the bookmaker's elves, crossed with the Borrowers, singing out this chant like slaves on the plantations sang as they worked, as they wrote in a dimly lit, dusty old shop. That was just the image that came to my mind, but it had a very mysterious, and at the same time cozy, feel to it. Sort of an exclusiveness. I liked it.

This is odd.

And much like a chant..."Who are we? The Knights! What are we going to do? Win! How are we going to do it?" ...etc.

I personally did not like this, as poetry anyway. I can't really tell you why...I've never seen anything like this called poetry.


Meg

Gyrfalcon you have achieved what I have tried to for SO long. Literally. I do agree that it does start to sound a bit like a cheerleader's chant, though. . .and lose of this little kid's thing I used to do

what's your name?
Mary Jane
Where fo you live?
Down the lane.
What do you eat?
Pig's feet.
What do you drink?
Pink ink.
What do you where?
Mommy's dirty underwear. [/b]

*shudders*
bad memories.

Towards the end it started to sound like a cheerleader's chant. But maybe that's just me

The 'no' questions got a little repetetive, but you do have some really beautiful imagery. 'Rustling of pages', 'unblemished sheets', and 'ink of the printers', to name a few. But mixing up the format a little would improve it, I think.

I really like it! A good description of authors!

just a note, guys: WE are the wordmakers

the idea is fantastic, it kinda reminds me of the plot of the next novel i'm planning to write.

i loved the style and the odd but excellect flow of the verse.
an interesting and mysterious poem and it makes me want to know more about the wordmakers.

Some parts were cliched, but nice idea. Good job!

Overuse of the word ...erm..."word"

yeah, I know nothing about poetry and you already know what I think of this one, but I just had to say it. I LOVE this. I'm going to tinker it into a paint document and stick it on my desktop. Yeah. Props for gyrfalcon.