anneonomus

Hi, thank you for your review! Punctuation was one of the things I wasn't sure about with this poem, and I still can't get the flow quite how I want ...

Hi, thank you so much! (also I love the shortened username, it's super cute!!) I'll definitely take this into consideration while I revise!

Oh, interesting! So almost the same as my half morbid curiosity half metaphor in this poem but external instead of internal- could even kill two birds with one stone if ...

Hi! Thank you for the review! I enjoyed your description of a broken bone- especially the bit about sleeping! Even though I've never broken anything, I did pull a tendon ...

Hi watchamacallit, thank you so much for your review! I'll definitely consider your notes when I revise!

Hi, thank you so much for your review! This poem is definitely a work in progress- in my mind, it's more like half of a poem, and I just still ...

Hello! Thank you so much for your review! If you don't mind me asking, what context have you thought about breaking bones in? I'm curious.

Hi! Thank you so much for your review!

Hello! Thank you so much for your review! I'm glad you picked up on the childlike vibes of the narrator- in my brain about half of this poem can be ...

Hi! Thank you for your review- and for sharing your experience with breaking a bone (it does slightly satiate my curiosity)!

Hi! I just want to say that as someone who struggles with depression, I completely understood where you were coming from in this poem. The apathy and emptiness really are ...

It looks fantastic! I'm glad my feedback was helpful! Also, I love the new line: watching them dance in the breeze. It really adds to the theme of happiness and ...

Thank you so much for your feedback! I will definitely try playing around with the line breaks and reading the pieces out loud!

Hi whatchamacallit! Thank you so much for your review! Your note about the line breaks for "don't let go" is especially helpful; I might try playing around with that!

Hi Penn! Thank you so much for your review and compliments! To clarify about the lines "pink" and "the night is your black velvet dress", I (or the speaker, technically) ...