hey, MomoandAppa, here to review!
i couldn't find any grammatical mistakes, but you don't want to break a bone. like, AT ALL. it hurts. so. much. i broke my arm a few years ago trying to do a cartwheel. at first, it hurts a lot. then it feels kinda numb. then you feel really cold and don't want to move your broken limb at all. when you have to get x-rays, those hurt a bit too. sleeping is the worst part, especially if you move a lot when you sleep.
anyway, all this to say, the poem itself is good. it's funny (in a weird way). i like it! keep writing!
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