alwaysawriter

The only thing I noticed is you didn't underline The Storybook every time you put it. Otherwise, I loved it. Great job! :D -Always

Some punctation errors but everyone covered everything already. It was a good story. I liked the conflict. Anyway, good job. :)

I liked it. Ailam covered everything, I think, but I liked the twist. :)

I liked it. Good job. :D

I thought it was really good. There were a few comma errors but that's it. I haven't read the other chapters but I was able to pick everything up immediantly. ...

From now on, in order for a message to be counted as a review, it must be 250 characters long. Since the average word is 5 characters long, that'd mean ...

Thanks. I knew it was a little short; it looked a whole lot bigger when I was writing in a notebook. I worked on some of Part 3 today--after finishing ...

I liked it. Expand more on the characters, like Scasha said. You don't tell us much about Alyssa or Johnny--other that Johnny is a great swimmer, Alyssa is skinny and ...

Thanks Heather. I wasn't really sure about how fast someone could push a truck anyway. I'll change it. As of dirt roads, there are plently of them in North Carolina; ...

Descriptions of Josh and your MC. And the "too" part too. Other than that, great story.

What I meant was the whole part about the her refeering back to 8th grade--sorry for the confusion. I know I need better punctation but I was having some trouble ...

It was a great story! Other than the format, I didn't see anything wrong with it. Good for a first post, though I wouldn't know. Great job!

That was a great exert! I loved all of the figurative language; I want to read more!