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Re: Parents-Chapter 1
I liked this chapter too. I think I'll stick around. (; Now, this fight between Bridget, Adrian, and Maddy kind of came out of no where. People don't usually come ...
Jul 21, 2009 -
Re: Parents-Prologue
This is good! I love the plot and the big twist in the end. I believe that everyone else has already had their fun with the nitpicking, so I'll stay ...
Jul 21, 2009 -
Re: Cold Blood
This story has a good plot, and I like it, but the rest of it is just too simple. You could do so much with this if you strengthened it ...
Jul 2, 2009 -
Re: Fate Calling
This was a really good and cute and romantic story.(: The descriptions and imagery are great. Just a few mistakes though: The vampire don't have heartbeats, so Alice's heart cannot ...
Jul 2, 2009 -
Re: To Write...
Ah, yes, my dear Cara. I wrote a poem about writing. It got in the top 20 for the 2009 Reflections Contest. The melting of the wax The flickering of ...
Jun 28, 2009 -
Re: Just Too Much
Hi! Well, this was a pretty good poem. Very relatable, and all that good stuff. The rhyming seems a little forced to me, some words stuck in that aren't needed. ...
Jun 28, 2009 -
Re: The Path
Yay! You wrote more! Kay, well, on the the reviewing/critiquing: It was an alien feeling this fear, it was not sheer terror, it did not suffocate, nor did it wholly ...
Jun 26, 2009 -
Re: Never He Wakes
This was really good. I like it a lot. I guess I can somewhat relate. There were a few typos in there: Someone’s crying in the kitchen. No one tells ...
Jun 26, 2009 -
Re: I have Four Scars
I love this poem. It's absolutley amazing. The first and second scars confuse me though. As someone else pointed out, they should be despcribed more, like the last two. The ...
May 31, 2009 -
Re: Those Little Glass Slippers (1)
This is an incredible, amazing piece of work. I love that you wrote it from someone other than the stepsisters', step-mother's points of view. The wording and imagery of the ...
May 31, 2009 -
Re: Sleeves.
My twin writes beautifully. I love this poem. Although: Darling, why must you cry? They all warned that he didn't love you, in your heart you knew it was all ...
May 30, 2009
