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I'm glad you enjoyed it! I cracked myself up quite a bit writing it. :) I'm hoping somewhere along the line I'll get around to planning out this story, but ...

Hey, AJ here. I'm not here to review this piece (many have already done so), but I just wanted to comment with some thoughts on this. First off, I understand ...

Ha, they are a bit complicated, but SO interesting to dive into. You ought to wait a couple years and try them again. Of course, I'm a literature nerd, so ...

Thanks for the review! The "armor" is, indeed, spiritual armor and this is written from the perspective of a Christian, but the chinks and holes are supposed to represent failures ...

Ha, not exactly... But keep guessing. :)

Thanks for the review. I appreciate the comments. I know the structure isn't ideal, but hey, I wrote it with a full brain and not a whole lot of time. ...

The poem is written as a progression, and that's why it's put into stanzas like that. Does it lead up to the ending? Of course, because that's what the whole ...

Thanks for reading! It's amazing how God works to bring truth to your mind, isn't it? :) I actually starting thinking up this concept when I was reading through Screwtape ...

Thanks for the review! I always appreciate as many reviews as people are willing to give. I haven't been able to develop Fan Girl's character much, but I haven't done ...

Thanks for the review! I would recommend going back and reading part one, if you haven't already. They are really intended to go together, but i didn't write it all ...

Thanks for the review! Yeah, I'm not entirely sure what to do with Emma. I don't think I'm making her into an evil character or anything, but she might have ...

Thanks for the review! (And a late welcome to YWS!) Hmm, I hadn't thought about the tone of the piece like that. I suppose some of the characters are dramatic, ...

Well, the story is intended to highlight cliche and poorly put together writing. (All authors do it to some extent, so this isn't intended to mock people. More like pointing ...

The way that this is written, I see it as a prologue, so I think the cliffhanger is perfectly fine if this is going into a full story. I think ...

Thank ya! I didn't exactly enjoy writing this, just because of the content, but it is interesting to study