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I really liked the first metaphor, "You are a broken record." It was a good way to start off the story. A few sentences could be broken up by comas ...

I liked the mystery of the situation, but there were just a few issues: 1. Whenever a new person speaks, you should start a new paragraph. It just makes it ...

Short and sweet! I liked the wording of this poem. Only one thing that I would have changed about it was in the last line. The poem has a rhythm, ...

Maybe on the first stanza, you could put "Frustrated, drenched in sweat" to make it flow a bit better. Also, maybe I'm just not very good at grammar and poetry, ...

Great book! I think the first sentence was really strong and made me want to keep reading. For the second sentence, it said "It always happens on the nights." I ...

It was very descriptive, and I liked the words used, but it got a little choppy at sometimes. Maybe try connecting the sentences with and or but in some points ...

I liked the idea of the poem, but I think that some of the descriptions are contradicting. The second line is saying that the character is stuck up, treating everyone ...