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  • Short Story » Dramatic, Realistic Re: Another S***** Day

    Hello Phoebe, Zoom here for a "review" even though you said you don't want anyone to reply. Anyway, first a note about curse words. Because this site is used by ...

    Jan 7, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Dramatic Re: The Middle Years - Chapter Two

    Hello Vil ^_^ Zoom back immediately for another review. (Zooooom) The Centaur was tall and broad-shouldered, a belted sword hanging over his back. He wore leather shoulder pads, and around ...

    Jan 7, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: The Middle Years - Chapter One (Revised)

    Hi Vil ^_^ Zoom here for a review. The y pair sat on the wooden front porch of a lovely home in the midst of a willow orchard. Nice imagery ...

    Jan 7, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Science Fiction Re: The Battles We Wage 1.1

    Hello Tuck ^_^ A low rumbling rumble shook the foundations of Skylar's home. Skylar She stirred awake and squinted out her window. A roving searchlight peeked through her window, which ...

    Jan 7, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Teen Fiction Re: Chapter One - A Tale of Two Songs

    Hello orbiteliza ^_^ Zoom here for a review! Glows: 1) I read this all the way through without stopping. Overall, it was well paced and immersive. 2) You set the ...

    Jan 3, 2021
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, Teen Fiction Re: The beginning of the end...

    Hello TheRandomWriter, ^_^ Zoom here for a review. I see you're new to YWS so welcome! Hope you enjoy your stay! I see you've already contributed 6 reviews so thanks ...

    Jan 2, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Mystery / Suspense Re: Murder By Starlight (Part 2)

    Hi cidrianwritersguild ^_^ Zoom here for a review (I read chapter 1) I checked out your profile and sadly you haven't been active for a few months. Hopefully you come ...

    Jan 1, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Narrative, Teen Fiction Re: Tomato Salvations - C. 1.2 - Draft 01 (1,631)

    Zoom here for another review. Joe dropped him off in front of the Tymberwood Flanks apartment building, and Rhys waited until he had driven off before bounding towards the fire ...

    Jan 1, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Narrative Re: Tomato Salvations - C. 1.1 - Draft One (1,582)

    Hello Squid ^_^ Zoom here to review. Admittedly I read this scene just so I could get to the next part of this chapter which is stuck in the green ...

    Jan 1, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: The Quest for Fire - Touch the Sky - Chapter Fifteen

    Hi felistia ^_^ I do apologise that I haven't read any of the previous chapters, though the name Zoltar sounds familiar so perhaps I peeked at some point. Because I'm ...

    Dec 31, 2020
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Dramatic Re: Chapter 1. - The Halloway forest

    Hi Ducklin ^_^ Zoom here for a review. I used to pray to God when I was a little kid to make it snow, but now I hate it. I ...

    Dec 31, 2020
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Fantasy Re: prologue

    Hello choclatewings, Not sure if this is an authentic submission... Just wanted to pop in and say that this prologue features swear words and you need to rate it accordingly. ...

    Dec 30, 2020
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: discontinued

    Hi Yoshi, Back to review the second chapter. Screaming was totally not my thing. I thought of myself mostly as tough. For example, I once fell from the top of ...

    Dec 30, 2020
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: discontinued

    Hello Yoshi ^_^ Here for a review. I'm unfamiliar with these characters / this world however you stated that wont be an issue so let's head on in! Fire. Add ...

    Dec 29, 2020
  • Novel / Chapter » Supernatural, Teen Fiction Re: The Witch's Return [4]

    Hello Magebird, Jack had been planning this moment for a long time. I went into this chapter pretty sure I was getting Jack's POV, so this made me smile. Usually ...

    Dec 28, 2020


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