Zion

I didnt read (most) of the crits mentioned above so my own crit may sound a little inferior compared to the other's :P but anyway... I liked the pacing of ...

Yeah. But, theres is a diffrence between this story and the one before. I might be wrong though, but I THINK that a bit more background will do the story ...

Her heart could break as well as any another though she was encased in a mass of machinery – wires and rods instead of flesh and sinew. Beneath that cold ...

What Nate said. Also, from a sci-fi point of view...i dont belive that scientists would acctually by (manually) typing on keyboards in the 32 century. Also, you might want to ...

I enjoyed reading this. :D I love how you gave the imagery for the celebration, it was almost as if I was there...amazing :) send me a PM for updates ...

::applause:: CL this was awesome I really enjoyed it! lol thx for adding moi. Its soo....freestylish, so...."I dont give a damn" style. The best thng of all is (something that ...

Arvy: I love you! anyzways enough of sounding like an obsessed fangirl I actually didn't think of Indigo Children when I wrote it, probably my subconcious working me over doubletime. ...

Quite beautiful. but I do think it needs just a wee bit more...finesse, more...soul, its not alive enough. When I read about fear I want it to be dynamic, I ...

"....God has killed men. ANd so shall we." ~Lestat, Interview with the Vampire Oh, how do I love that movie...*IwtV soundtrack starts playing, Arv bursts into a dance* I love ...

Now this was some kinky **** :D But I really liked it. It does have "******** in da closet" spirit in it, but it has some sort of a greater ...

O.O ooooooh kay........Qi, whats the name of this poem? "You are so ugly the last time i talked to you on the phone i got ear infection"? Personally, i dont ...

You tuna! :D :D You stupid tuna! Now, like, i dotn get one thing really......if tuna is a vulgarity from now on can we say tuna on the boards? cuz ...

Ah....the b***** called writing skills. If you leanr how to ocntrol it wil succumb to you. If it starts control you, you will succumb to its chaotic will. Writers a ...

Unfortunately I didnt red the entire thing. Only the Elves part. There are som good things and some bad. Usually I suck and cits but im trying to learn heh... ...

Hm...I like it. Its very interesting its written with such ease in a way. No "big" words and such. It drives you to read it. But I got a little ...