ZanyPlebeian

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I have some divided feelings over this poem. I like it; I'll say that much. You used some creative language and showed me something orginal while at the same time ...

Yeah, I felt this one attempted to have a rhythm but sort of stumbled over it at times. There were a few good word choices, such as "Painfull is to ...

A simple poem, but nice. I liked the way you wrote it, the voice was perfect. i don't know what the above posters mean by "poetic language" but I don't ...

Very nice! I think the best part of this poem is the voice in it; I can tell you feel what you're saying. The only thing I would change are ...

Hmmm...I feel like I should comment on this since I somehow ended up in it... it's HIGHLY aggressive and comes off as overbearing at times. As sorry as I am, ...

it's an interesting poem... "yet others sparkle, ‘n’ only one in a thousand, once a lifetime, shimmer. " That piece I found refreshing. "because I see an entire humanity enraptured ...

Bravo! Easily the best poem of yours I've read. I think it started off a bit shaky; I was sort of annoyed by the repetition of "six billion." After the ...

The Good, the Bad, and the Ugly: The Good "We never read the shapes of words anymore, nor the succulent-smooth taste nor their echoey sound in mighty cathedrals nor their ...

Like the images a lot--I can identify with them. The casual style of the poem works, and yet I feel something more needs to be done with it. "I just ...

Very well-written. I can percieve a mature voice in this poem, and the somewhat sad, yet content outlook that I picked up from it is very satisfying to me. Add ...

I enjoyed this poem. You gave me plenty of imagery and it had a meaningful, somewhat depressing, message. I like that the mechanics of this poem did not have any ...