Where Ghosts Come Together With Other Ghosts

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ooooo....crows...

I really enjoyed this one hon, I'd do a more indepth critique but I'm pressed for time. Later then I will.

Betty

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ZanyPlebeian
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Very well-written. I can percieve a mature voice in this poem, and the somewhat sad, yet content outlook that I picked up from it is very satisfying to me. Add that to the beautiful imagery, and it's a great poem. The only (very minor) thing that bothered me was the capitalization at the beginning of each line; my brain naturally starts a new sentence on capitalization, and that was a tiny nuisance.



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