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Hi Septemb, I'm Izzy I agree with the above, this should be a prologue. I will give you a review anyway but what I recommend is writing a longer chapter ...

Hi, sorry this has taken me so long to get around to. But your right, this should just be the initial draft, it still needs some work. I have to ...

Hi omsvmars, just giving you a quick review :) “You really don’t have to do this you know.” Yes, I knew. I knew that I didn’t have to do any ...

Hi and welcome to YWS I just wanted to say that I was a bit taken a back when I read my first critique, I felt so insulted. But you ...

A bat bit her neck! Pleaseee say she's gonna turn into a vampire, we need a good old vampire story around here. It's great actually because with all the modern ...

Hi I'm izzy, just gonna give you a quick review. Firstly what a lovely title, it's so original and really drew me in. I don't think I've ever heard that ...

Oh my god. Best poem I've ever read. No exaggeration. On YWS and anywhere else, literally. I just love it, the idea the rhtyhum, everything. I'm gonna have to point ...

Hi i'm izzy, just gonna give you a quick review :) I’m sick of looking out my window each day and feeling like I have to do something before my ...

Hi I'm izzy, just giving you a quick review :) Right, great idea that I haven't seen a lot of and it's written well, just have a few problems with ...

Hi I'm izzy and I will be reviewing your work today :) Okay to start of I thought this poem was fantastic but I think your use of metaphors and ...

Hi Maddy, just giving u a quick review. i really like this poem, could do with a little improvement but its excellent, I can really tell what your writing about. ...

I don't really feel authorised enough to review this, it's amazing. To be honest the only thing I noticed was the incorrect tense in your first section but I think ...

Hi, I'm Zaddie and I will be reviewing you work today. I have to admit I do love the concept you are working with here, of someone dying on there ...

You are gonna get some high marks for this mads, A* all the way. I loved it, great take. I totally went of topic with mine, gone on a woffle ...

Wow, I really liked this. I don't think I need to correct it as the two people above have already done a pretty good job. I saw you were 13, ...