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Okay, the first comment was an accident, but this is actually a review now. Haha. First impression: I liked it. It has a unique use of the poetical structure, rather ...

Haha. I hope so. That would be an interesting read. I like the idea. And the imagery. And even putting it in a poem this way. One issue: "literature sits ...

Hey, I'm just doing some casual edits, on my part. Overall, it is good, but I just want to offer some gentle suggestions. "Cyclic Sunrise"

Initially, I didn't want to review this work. Why? Because it made me terribly uncomfortable. It evoked a real emotional response. Lets investigate this response and see what we can ...

Two lines saved this poem: "She hates him for this, But loves him for everything else." Those two lines pack a big punch. Personally. I'd literally just have that be ...

First of all, use punctuation. Really, this is ridiculously hard to read. I can't hold my breath that long and you don't convey yourself clearly without it. If you have ...

"who loved him, they're better off than he is and they're better off than I am - for I have been imprisoned by the public and " I caught a ...

I like it. It's short and sweet and packs a punch. The possessiveness of the speaker over his/her darling is tangible, and it paints a clear distinct image of someone ...

This isn't a real critique. I'm just going to tell you how I "feel" about this poem. I don't think this poem is true to you. I don't feel any ...

lol are you serious? Honest initial impression (HII): I laughed and thought it was a joke. I read it twice and my HII still stands. It's a clever rhyme you ...

I was scrolling through the "new" dramatic poems and I noticed yours because no one had written you a reply but now I understand why. When you stumble upon a ...

Well, it seems I really only have one critique, to be honest. Just work on making your metaphors more concrete? There is a lot of sensuality and imagery, but I ...

Excuse me for a minute, I am going to be blunt. WAIT A MINUTE!!!!!!! Achille's heel?!?! YOUR GREEK METAPHORS ARE OFF! His heel was a weakness, you can TOTALLY live ...

Just a warning. I am going to give you a real and clear honest critique. It might upset you, so if it does, stop reading after this first paragraph, but ...

Like a Fiddler? I would entitle it "Fiddler on the Roof" ;), wouldn't that be ironic. I'm sure you know of that old tale. In concerns to the poem at ...