Xreigon

Very powerful. I commend you on this. Catharsis is what a writer desires a poem to bring out in the reader and yours did this. The first section/stanza is quite ...

Good job! I read the whole thing and I really liked it! I would advise going through at making some small changes in grammar and spelling, but I think you ...

That is somewhat morbid, but I liked it still. My poetry ends up being dark anyway, so who am I to judge? :) This is a good format for this ...

interesting concept. I like the way that you formatted this. In poetry, formatting, capitalization, and punctuation can create a whole new depth to a piece. Some of your lines, though, ...

Woah. This one strikes a more personal note with me--I have a brother with special needs. Anyway, the idea of this piece is a good one and the end is ...

Oooooooo! I liked that. Your characters are very realistic and I can see them in my mind's eye, talking to each other. This leaves me with questions...why is the wife ...

Very good. I am going to assume that your lack of punctuation is a type of literary device, so I will not make a comment on that. I liked the ...

I like this. Is it purposely left open-ended? Do you have a thought of what it is about in your mind and you have chosen not to share? That's fine. ...

That was quite is interesting that when one explore the lore that surrounds unicorns, the stories shift between the My Little Pony unicorns and the vicious killing machines. Your story ...

I like this. I really loved the first stanza. It was beautiful and it captured my attention. I have no comments on that one. The second stanza however, it didn't ...

Wow. Very wow. That was a very well written piece. I think that the short length was a good fit for this piece. I would give you advice just a ...

Okay! I can't finish reading it until you get some punctuation. That may sound a little harsh, but it is VERY necessary. People cannot focus on the content if they ...

Good job! I liked your story, even though it was a it confusing when it jumped from character to character. Quick grammar lesson because I noticed it more than once: ...

Ooooooo...I like it! Good job! I can see where you went back from the other one and tried to give a bit of background. This one should go first. Perhaps ...

Very interesting! I enjoyed it, and I want to read more! I am assuming that this is a random scene in a story, and I am going to treat it ...