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This was an interesting beginning and definitely drew me into the characters. The overall idea seemed a little cliche to me (I could practically guess what was going to happen); ...

This was quite good. Your writing style is beautiful, and your characterization is usually good. This may just be my opinion, but I feel that the story moved a little ...

Hallo! Welcome to YWS! This was very interesting - interesting idea to write from the perspective of the dragon. Royboy suggested you italicize or quote the dialogue; I agree. As ...

Ooooh, this was quite good, very intriguing. You've set up your characters nicely and begun to develop them. I hope you write more of this; I'd like to know more ...

Oooh, this was very nice. And very interesting. You asked for constructive criticism... so here I go. I am known for being very nitpicky, so the fact that I point ...

Hey Shriek! I really enjoyed this. It was written in a very unique way - one I haven't seen much around here- but it was well-written and beautifully done. Your ...

It seems the issue of grammar and such has already been brought up, so I get the fun job of giving you some impressions. I'd like to second all that ...

Well, a lot of people have already said a lot of the things I noticed, but I'll help how I can. :) Firstly, this was very good. You really have ...

This was very interesting. Chilling, but fascinating. Good description; fast-paced during action sequences which is excellent. For the most part, good word choice. I like the way you made the ...

I liked the concept of this and you had some very powerful language. For the most part, your rhyming flowed naturally and was not forced. I liked it. For the ...

Interesting. You certainly have a fascinating land and your characters seem strong so far. This could be very interesting, but there is one thing that really killed this piece for ...

This was good start; you have some good description and your character is quite realistic. I can't wait to see where this is going. So, here is what I am ...

You have a good start here, but I feel like in the first paragraph, you just told me all about King Thane. If your intent was as Meep suggested, to ...

This was pretty good. Your description of action sequences is very crisp and good (which I admire. I am awful at writing actions sequences), and the way you set up ...

As DQ mentioned, this needs to be divided into paragraphs. I understand this is a rough draft, but it is extremely aggravating to read this piece if it is not ...