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Hi there, FireArris! :wink: This was cute; I'm not sure if there's any more to it, but it was short and cute, a good stand alone dialogue. So, here's what ...

*sniffles* Myles is dead! :cry: My poor Myles. I could rant this entire post about how sad I am Myles died, but somehow I don't think that would help you. ...

Hello there, Lucky Duck! You have a nice start here - an idea with a lot of potential, and Maura is a neat name. So, here's what I'm going to ...

Like Claudette said, you really need to post more of this. Also, this seemed like a repetition of the prologue; you were saying a very similar thing, just giving us ...

I agree with those above. It was a - well - interesting idea, but it was too wordy. When something is too wordy, it means that the amount of words ...

An interesting concept here, though I do not fully understand it. Like others, I was irked by the uniform sentence structure. Variety is your friend. A few technical things... She ...

:shock: Claudette, dear, I think you need to cut down on the cannibalism. It was a cute poem, nevertheless. The rhyming seemed a bit forced at times, but it was ...

Hello Twinflower! I enjoyed this immensely. Your writing is as vibrant as ever, and your pace is great. Not rushed at all, yet not dragging either - perfect. Your description ...

Hey there, JC! I'm glad I got around to reading this. I still love the voice, and your story is developing nicely. Truly wonderful. Only a few things... Melodramatic thinking, ...

I second everything Claudette said, especially about the first chapter. I'm not going to reiterate everything she said, but I will give you some suggestions in the introduction. Obviously, Fawn ...

Hey there, Twinflower! Mmm, this was very enjoyable. I love the names of your characters. :D Your pace is nice, and the characterization is coming along. Great bit of writing ...

Hey Elein! I'm glad I finally got to this; it was a joy to read. Aside from all the typos, your writing style was great and, though the number of ...

I echo Claudette. You made an effort at painting a scene in the reader's mind to help convey your theme, but it still needs some work. Imagery is the most ...

*rated R for language* (one mention of F word = R :wink:) Hey JCobsesed! I loved your voice in this piece; it was very unique and biting. I usually don't ...

Hello, there, author! I like your writing style - it flows beautifully, and your characters have very natural dialogue. It is very hard to critique excerpts from large pieces of ...