Wolferion

First of all I'd like to welcome you to YWS community =) Now I'd get to the reviewing. I liked the stanzas of two verses you used, they rhymed well ...

Pretty much everything was said before me, so I'll skip to the stanza you added. I think it's a really good one and should be kept =) The words used, ...

I must agree with Tenyo. I'm a person that likes both styles, but this one bugged me quite a lot. It's got no structure, it's just lines. Good lines of ...

I kind of like the message you mean with this poem, however I was a bit bugged by the fact there's little punctuation and also I believe the same as ...

Cheers! I haven't spotted anything really bad about the poem except the fact that you do not use any dots or comas at all and that messes whole poem, you ...

Felt kind of deep and emotional, that's good ^^ The flow of text went good, I had no trouble reading it fluently except : They say you’ve used much too ...

In comparison to WordsInMyMind's poem about Wisdom this made me imagine a writer sitting, leaning against a tree, and writing this down on in his notebook. The reason for that ...

It's a free rhyming as I noticed, but it compensates the lack of rhythm with it's sentence structure and words used. Whole work feels like an advice from somebody, who's ...

Cheers! So finally the time to review your piece of work =) Alright, I'll go according to my usual review form. Let's start with the mistakes! Mistakes 1) The doctors ...

Cheers! Haven't read such a story in a while, it sure has got some original elements despite the a bit "cliche" death scene ( sorry about that, just have read ...

Cheers! Haven't seen a talk about this in a while ( We do hear a lot about them in my class in my country ). While reading I spotted a ...

I agree with the both posts above. Aside the very little information about the two MCs, it feels like an informational bomb about the world. I believe it's good to ...

Hiya! As this is a short story and a good one on top of that, I shamefully do not have much to say. While I was reading I came across ...

Hiya! So let's get on with the review, shall we? :) I'll go with the flow of the story first. 1) I think that mentioning her name before or mentioning ...

I'll go and admit I agree with some of the points winie made. If you erased the "We were on the beach" and simply went on with second verse as ...