Wolferion

And so here I come, late X_X Oh well =D I've checked the reviews before me and I agree with Jetpack. As a story itself, I do think it's got ...

Cheers! =) Let's start with grammar. Grammar “Stop complaining,” Mr. Mahoney told his son, taking the small first aid kit from me, “Thank you Sophie - you’re not the one ...

I'll start with grammar. What I put in quotes is what I fixed and next to it my comment. Grammar Paradise manor, made and owned by Alexander Thrush. - I ...

Cheers! So I've got the time to review this piece =) I think I saw a few comma mistakes along the way, but then again I left it be as ...

Cheers! I'm here as asked =) I haven't noticed any bad grammar mistakes and I had no trouble following the flow of text, that's a + for you. I'll agree ...

I'm ashamed to say, but both reviews before me have pointed out pretty much everything I had in mind. They're pretty good reviews, try to get the best from them ...

Cheers! I haven't really spotted any grammar mistakes, so I won't mention it here =) However, I'd noticed there were a few words you repeated often. It's not really horrible, ...

Cheers! Well, it looks like almost everything was already said heh. Anyway, I'd go and agree with the rest that the poem is good. I liked the way it was ...

Cheers! You might hear that this is kind of cliche, since 'love theme' is heavily overused lately, though there's that touch of 'yourself' in it and that's what we'll be ...

Cheers! So there it goes as asked =) I haven't read the previous chapters, so I'll do the role of a reader that grabbed a book and just to see ...

Cheers! I won't go detailed about grammar here as you haven't edited your post yet and Stori has already mentioned the mistakes I've noticed too. As to about the story ...

Gramar ,but I know I won't be here very long, - I think the 'for very long' is better, maybe even as far as 'for much longer'. He to has ...

Cheers! I've got a free lesson at school so I'll review this with the time I have left. I'll go through what didn't feel right first and then for the ...

Cheers! Haven't seen one of those in quite some time =) Well, basically the poem was done well, I didn't have to imagine anything complex and the scenery for me ...

Welcome to the YWS community =) Now I'm sorry but I'll be harsh. This seriously was one big 'description' telling. I say telling, because I barely sensed any 'show' element ...