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Thanks for the review! :} An A student? I wish...well, A's in Language, but I failed Math. >.< Heh.

Thanks Suzanne! You're right - I did write this more for myself than the reader. And lol, I also like the last bit. Heehee. I will probably switch perspectives around ...

Wow, thanks so much! :D That was really helpful! I'll make the changes as soon as I get home, because now I'm using an agonizingly slow school computer. >.< This ...

Thanks Meggets!

Ning, you are a far cry from being dumb! Sorry it took me so long to reply to this...I only just noticed all these topics of mine in which I've ...

:oops: I kind of abandoned this piece... Canis, I see what you mean about the purpleness. Bleck. I need to change that 'lest it will plague me forever. :P

Yeah, sorry 'bout that you guys. It must have been really annoying to read all my little bumpings.

Thanks Gwen! I'll try reading it out loud; maybe I'll notice something I can improve on flow-wise.

Thanks! :D I'll try to read your guide, but I'm grounded so it might be a while before I get around to it.

My tetrouse life had yet again left me with no answer. 'Tetrouse' sounds awesome, but it's not a real word. :P Did you mean 'Torturous'? A tear beggings to form ...

Thanks! :) Is there anything I can improve on though?

Thanks Nikki! I appreciate the compliments. :) But I'm sure you'll find that there are plenty of bette young writers on the site. :wink:

Thanks! :D I'm currently working on chapter one, but seeing as I can only get on during school ('cuz I'm grounded) I won't be able to post it for a ...

Aw, thanks! :D I'll be adding more tomorrow, since now I'm not supposed to be on the computer...*shifty eyes*

The woman stepped out of the shadows her red lips where drawn back revealing rather sharp teeth in a savage snarl. Maybe it's just a matter of personal opinion, but ...