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Whoa, I'm way overdue in critting this! :oops: I had left the barren valley behind and was now wading through waist-deep grass under a sparkling sun. There was a glistening ...

:D Critique Four of Five :D Meh. Azila has been here before me, so there might not be much to point out. :P But I shall comment anyways. My pony-tail ...

Hey tania! This is an interesting start to a poem, but there are some issues: - Clichés: It's become very un-original to write about depending on someone to live, methinks. ...

Wow, that was very pretty! :) That flicker of knowing before the night That crushed-on-the-inside sigh The last line there is a little wordy... but I'm no poetry expert, so ...

Hey there, kittykat! :D I am very impressed that you can write things like this at eleven (I don't even think I could write poems a year ago... and I'm ...

Hey Jared! *smacks head* And I thought I could arrive before the other critiquers! *points at JabberHut and yells 'crit hog!'* Anyways. Forgive me if I repeat anything, but these ...

Wow, Via - this is so good. :) I have read poems on this subject before, but you managed to write yours in a cliché-free way. So kudos on that. ...

Hey shanan-cat! So you're fifteen now, eh? :wink: Nit-picks first... Tears escaped from my eyes, and I didn't like it so became my emo self again and released my pocket ...

Hey Cat! Sorry it's taken me so long to critique... :oops: Anyways, as BBB and Azila have already covered all the nit-picks, I'll just give you some general advice, using ...

Aww, this is so cute! I love this story, LOVE the hot art guy, absolutely fell in love with the emotions, but I think you cut it off way too ...

>>> Critique Three of Five >>> Totems 3 is already up? Awesome! :D Well, nit-picks first, as always: The ancient and rotting wood creaks as I sit down, sketch book ...

Hey Emily! :D You have a very interesting start here, and I want to read more. That's a good sign. However, there are some things to consider before I move ...

Yep, this is definitely a tear-jerker... ... because seeing such a cliched, hallmark-style (as Cade said) poem is enough to make me cry with despair. This is going to sound ...

SirWozzell -- I haven't got time to critique now, but I will make an effort to come back to this later if it hasn't received any [good] critiques by then. ...

“Mommy!” The child whimpered, knowing her mother was dead. Hhmm... Meh. Maybe you should do: "Mommy," the child whimpered. The black demon had...(etc) It's just that using an exclamation point ...