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>> Critique three of three >> Hey Jared! Sorry it's taken me so long to crit this, but I've been swamped. First entry: This entry is good, but I don't ...

Wow, err... *dies of a laughing fit* *gasping for breath* I have returned from the dead to give you this critique! [quote] “Milkman!” He turned round, to see a tall ...

I'm going to have to agree with Azila about your characters. Nobody is actually like that - we can discuss it in greater detail tomorrow, when you come over. I ...

Hey enjeru! :D This is a really short chapter, but I'll do an in-depth crit anyways. “Gah!” I jump up. “Don’t sneak up on me like that, Bryson!” He grins ...

Extraterrestial -- Do you even read the critiques that people write for you? Or do you ignore them, and only come on YWS to post your stories? I'm not trying ...

Warrior Princess -- This is okay, as far as the quality of the poem goes. There is some pretty - if not clichéd - imagery, and he flow is generally ...

Ning! I actually think this is a very interesting story, but there are tons of grammatical, punctual, and spelling mistakes. You might want to try proof-reading this before you post ...

I still owe you two crits, don't I? Well then - >> Critique two of three >> I think that I’m in love. Crap! Now that I finally put that ...

Haha! I am here second. *feels triumphant* Compared to Derrin’s devastating, yet graceful strength, Sillon was hopelessly doomed when it came to combat. I;m not sure about the comma after ...

Hey ning! :) The title struck me as kind of emo, and that's probably not a good thing. But onto the critique! The circular silver moon drifted across the dawning ...

I'm here to [s]tear up[/s] critique chapter four! :D He is much like the other three, but much different as well. He is a bit shorter, and a hell of ...

Hey enjeru! I'm here for chapter three. :) “No, I can smell it on you.” He replies. Instead of the period after 'you', put a comma. James looks somewhat distracted, ...

Sorry it's taken me so long to critique - I walk away form the school as if I had a purpose. 'form' should be 'from'. :wink: When I'm sure no ...

I'm sorry, but I'm not even going to bother with an in-depth critique for this. There are so many typos in just four short paragraphs - it gives me the ...

Zomg, I just realized that there's a prologue to this! *hyperventilates* I know I should be reviewing the first chapter, but it wouldn't seem right if I overlooked this bit, ...