Wolf

I don't have time for a critique, but there's some things you should know about YWS... You know? Like dang I thought purple was the most wonderful color, and so ...

*claps for... a week* That was so... incredible, Sam! Really refreshing and well-written, enviably so. I'm afraid that this critique won't be too helpful, but I'll try... Some points for ...

Hey, Monki! :) First of, let me say that I have to agree with Cade and Suzanne. This is just a diary entry, really, but I think you have the ...

Hm... this is okay? The rhyming is pretty good, but as Jenna said, it kind of holds something back... have you ever tried non-rhyming poetry? You should -- it's very ...

Before one of the mods comes to tell you: You should not put your full name on the Internet; it isn't safe. You should edit it out. Also, you should ...

Wow. I always thought Paolini was off his rocker, but meeting a God? What pap. Considering the quality of the writing in Eragon and Eldest, I seriously doubt that he'll ...

Hey there! :D I'm Wolf, as you might have realized. I haven't got the time for a very good critique right now -- this will just be some basic points. ...

And page two! I. DESCRIPTIONS You have all these adjectives but they don't really contribute to the writing in any way. They're just kind of annoying to read and they ...

I'm here, as promised! :) ... but since I'm short on time, I didn't read everyone else's critiques. So I may repeat things -- but you'll be getting my fabulous ...

Hey KJ! I promised I'd critique this, but I haven't started to yet. Homework (not to mention the pile of reviews-to-do I have) has me pretty bogged down for now, ...

No grammar editing? Aww... But I just have to point out this: There was a letter placed on the grand piano. I don't like this as an opening sentence, mainly ...

Hey Keek! I tried to do a full-edit here, but my scanner broke down and I only got the first three pages. =_= And even those are bad-quality, I think. ...

Hey Jenna! =) Sorry it's taken me so long to get around to this. :oops: His light footsteps sounded on the stairs, before he came into view, with one hand ...

Hey BBB! :D It was the photo album of my parent’s wedding. Should be: parents' wedding. ‘My dearest Tamera, Why have you stopped searching? Love can be found in the ...

Hey Ginger! :) “Are you sure you’re going to be okay? Do you want me to come with you, I don’t mind?” The second sentence here doesn't sound right... I ...