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MadHatter -- What are you trying to achieve with this? Since you quarreled with Gwen, all you've written is pretty lame stuff. I'm sorry to say, but this is pointless ...

The Shadowy figure dashed with lightning speed straight at her, she screamed and was thrown back with such a force that she hit he head hard against the corner of ...

Yeah...umm, where is your opening exactly? All I see is 'Hope you enjoy my opening'. If you only submitted that, then you should click 'Edit' and include your actual story. ...

the morrow -- This is very creative. I really like it, although some of the vocabulary was too complex for my 12 year-old mind. You, crutch of the mind, fetter ...

bkwrm - This is a pretty good poem. You have beautiful imagery, and the theme is vaguely original; but I get the feeling that I've read lots of poems about ...

Incandescence - Wow. Your prose is almost as amazing as your poetry. And considering that you wrote this an a drug-induced stage - by the way, don't do drugs - ...

I haven't read the previous four chapters [yet], so this critique will be mainly for grammar. Just as Alita thoughts she was alone (except for the playful squirrels above); she ...

I agree that there are too many questions in this, but I don't think you should get rid of them. :) I think you should elaborate on your questions. Now ...

I don't like the line breaks in this, primarily because it doesn't fit with the theme. I always think of fire as flowing and hungry, but your poem seems kind ...

This looks awesome! :D I am: Whoever I want to be I wonder: About rain and fire I hear: The sound of a thousand sufferings I see: The trees outside ...

Wow... The imagery and the flow in this is excellent. You really caught my attention and held it until the end. And even after the end, I was thinking about ...

Wow, that was awesome! I don't think you should change anything. This was short, but to the point and extremely well-written. Really, this was amazing. I really liked the part ...

I didn't really understand this - but I'm young[er] and poetry is often hard for me to understand. I love this line: I set my gaze the way I used ...

Yeah... This is the usual angsty dog poo that is posted daily on forums everywhere. I hope you're not writing this about yourself - no one shoudl EVER by guilty ...

Erm... To be brutally honest, this was: - Unoriginal - Bad quality - Badly thought out Most lines didn't make sense. Also, I noticed that you tried a rhyming scheme, ...