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Emily -- Meeeeeeow! Writing about unrequited love already, are we? Perhaps a hint on what guy in our HR class you like? Huh? Huh? Any ways. Onto the critique! As ...

arch angel --- Please don't submit more than one story per day, okay? People get annoyed when the forums are all clogged with your work. Although I am quite envious ...

arch angel -- Not bad, but not exactly good either. But don't despair! You have every means to make it good! Here are those means: • A library/Bookstore. I'm sure ...

Terrible. If you can't see the forest for from the inside of your navel don't write poetry. I'm afraid that I agree with smorgish here. This is...not very good. I ...

David and he spent their whole life together. Since they were twins it was difficult for the system to put each of them in separate foster homes. They began in ...

NIT-PICKS: I see a girl running in the night, from what, is unknown. I think this sentence would be better as: I see a girl running in the night, but ...

Crying Rain -- This is okay. You have some basic imagery, but nothing special. Nothing complex. There is emotion, and that's good. But the emotion pales in comparison to the ...

It's about time I critiqued this! It's a wee bit long, so I'll do it in fragments. First up: prologue! My anger festering, with every true love's kiss. That sounds ...

gothgirl01 -- (Prepare for a very harsh review) I was wincing as I read this. Grammar has been pointed out, and spelling, but the poem in general is just not ...

Lol, that was awesome. I love your word choices and wait - Dono? As in Hunter? :lol: Anyways, this is really short (short but sweet) so I really have nothing ...

Two snow-white children silent in the brisk of autumn. I'm not sure about the 'snow-white' description. It's rather cliched, so maybe you could say something else to suggest that they ...

Oh wow, this is very long. I may only be able to do half. >.< I’ll share this with you, I offered. Cú, the King's old wolfhound, gave me a ...

The Trout River was a small bridge that was built across a seasonal stream. The Trout river is a small bridge?! However, it did house a large amount of fish ...

Extraterrestial -- If I were you, I wouldn't be starting a separate story, seeing as your 'Night Walkers' is chock-full of mistakes. I'm not trying to sound mean, but before ...

Riedawriter23 -- This is beautiful. Your imagery is fantastic, and this a lovely and original theme. I agree with JasmineHart that the second line is a bit too strong, though. ...