WinnyWriter

Thanks for the review! It is helpful.

Ok your comment was insightful on your style.

Thanks for the review! I appreciate people who actually point out specific things!

This is an awesome, beautiful story! Please, please keep writing!!

Hey, I'm still loving this story! The flashback is very nice. I like how you used that to tell us details about the story, as opposed to just stating facts ...

Nice story! I like how you've confronted racism. You've put Jamie in a positive light by having her deal with it in a calm, sensible manner and not by causing ...

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Thanks for the review! Very helpful.

You have written a good story. The point is thought-provoking. It would be good to use more punctuation, because without it, it's hard to tell where one thought ends and ...

Thanks for the feedback. I was typing in a hurry, so that's probably why I had typos. Also, the tips on the wording are helpful. I'm actually hoping to make ...

Very powerful! I love how you showed the carelessness and callous of the "unbroken" person. This work is very effective at getting its point across.

You've presented an interesting perspective. Cool how it looks into the reality of things. I also like how the world revolution does not show up in the poem, but as ...

I understand your struggle with older English. However, keep in mind that your story is mostly told in more current language, so it might not be too horrible to avoid ...

Hey, nice story. :) I noticed a few areas where there were maybe some grammatical errors, or at least spots where it could be tweaked to flow more smoothly, but ...