Willow

I cringe. So much. I wrote this when I was 12 and posted it when I was 14. It was the first piece of writing I ever attempted (they weren't ...

Thanks for the crit Sam :) (especially the scull thing, I guess that's were my not being English comes through :oops: ) The part about her uncle trying to bite ...

Thanks for the crit guys. *waves back at Sam* The guy was based on someone I had seen that day. I didn't get close enough to see if he had ...

Thanks for replying Jiggy This is kinda the way I write. I write whatever I feel like at the moment, just to write. This was one of those pieces. I ...

I had to let something happen between them :P Thanks guys

Okay, i've changed it a bit so that it's rarely overwhelming. What do you guys think of Nirvei instead of Nudith?

This is just like a little part in between. Do you think I should change Nudith to Amaia?

Thanks guys I also have a problem with the name, but i couldn't think of a better one. I got it off an Elfish name generator, and it's supposed to ...

Thanks guys :)

Thanks guys. He actually only gave her a peck on the cheek, but there will be more. Coming soon :wink:

I'm a bit stuck on the story right now. I don't really know what should happen next. But thanks for the crit :D

It's a magicky sort of thing that's burned into their flesh. Magorian just masked the pain a little coz he's supposed to be kind and stuff. thanks guys

I agree with Emm, something isn't right. Perhaps if she explained more about what Laverne did to freak Mandy out and why she suddenly decided they couldn't be friends anymore. ...

Thanks for the crit Sam I'll work on it

It's kind of a continuation of Burk and hare, one of the other stories I've posted here