Wherethewindgoes

Salutations. I really like these; some of the lines sound really, say, meaningful, or memorable. I only have a few corrections. One thing I noticed was commas. For each time ...

Salutations. This is really good, and I don't have many suggestions for improvement. I like the conflict here with Auxi's past and such. A few suggestion: Zach chuckled quietly and ...

Salutations. There's only so much that I can give. Only so much of me that you can take. I'm only so much, like a glass broke into pieces and though ...

Salutations. Welcome to YWS! i sighed as camrie told me... "Gintri we cant go my dad is sick again im sorry..." camrie pretty much said to herself. Firstly, "I" should ...

Salutations. Welcome to YWS! I kind of like this, but I think it would be much better structured as a poem. Perhaps something like A letter A sonnet A ballad ...

Salutations. I have come hither to review another of your works. I be briefer this time. It took everyone in the room a moment to register what had just occurred. ...

Salutations, Stripelife. All rooms where occupied in the town of David where Jesus had been lied In the first line, I think you meant were . Also, I would agree ...

Salutations. It seems that PenguinAttack has already gone over the storyline, so I suppose I shall correct grammar. This was mostly well-written, but there are a few errors: Jacque Leffere ...

Welcome to YWS, vewrites! I noticed that this seems to be filed under fanfiction, but I'm not sure what it is based off of. Is that a mistake, or is ...

Salutations. I am intrigued with this story, and excited to read more. I have a few corrections I would suggest. Firstly, the narration seems a bit repetitive. A lot of ...

Salutations. I'm curious as to whether this is the end of the story. It says it's a short story, but you have multiple parts, so I'm not sure whether this ...

This is interesting, certainly. I like the excitement in the chapter, and how you quickly caught the readers' attention. There are a lot of sentence-level things I think should be ...

Hmm. I kind of liked the idea here, and I think this has the potential to be poignant. However, the story needs more extrapolation; right now it goes way too ...

I like the rhyming structure of the poem, but some of the rhythms and syllables were off. For example: A creature of fire stands there He says, "I'm your nightmare." ...