Whatsarahsaid

I liked this, but it was too long and very obvious how it was going to end. If you wanted to shock the reader in a climax, you should shorten ...

Well actually, I'm sure I'm breaking a rule or too.....

Thank you again Snoink, and many thanks to Hope as well. I actually cringe when I read this now., all those grammatical errors! Well anyway, my first attempt of a ...

Amazing. I can scarcely type, this is the best thing I have read in sometime. You are everthing I could hope to be... Love your style. "he kissed her with ...

Thanks Matt.

Interesting the way you used the ocean. I found the structure quite effective, good use of metaphors.

That's exactly why I chose that imagery. I also used "Prada on concrete" because it's the comparison of something lovely and something urbanised and grimy. Is that pretentious?

Ok she is a prostitute.

Thank- you all for the comments, good or bad I'm glad you gave me your honest opinions. I actually don't particulary like this poem, It came to me while I ...

He hee great irony. I love black humour!

Totally understanderble why that won.. Well Done yet again Snoink AliceXx