Werthan

Thanks! I thought reading it aloud would be enough to make it clear since some things are obvious references and the meter and weird rhymes themselves divide the poem, but ...

I'd recommend trying to read it aloud before giving me advice. "You reside in darkness" is not being shouted and reading it will make that clear, for one thing. Thanks ...

Thanks! The narrator is supposed to be a bit weird because this is the future and they're a robot but I'll work on the unclear parts. She's also not leaving ...

Thanks! The building actually doesn't get entirely burned down, just really scorched. The woman doesn't leave because she can't/thinks she can't and the suggestion comes off absurd in context. The ...

I found a way to fix that one easily. Thanks!

Thanks! The lack of punctuation was intentional and based on the poem's inspiration, and it's really supposed to be a narrative poem where the speaker is just generalizing to try ...

The Beatniks liked to refer to William Blake a lot. This poem is not really serious since it was based on what I'm sure is an objectively bad book not ...

Thanks! I just read a crappy book that wasn't by any of those people and generalized based on that, so don't take it too harsh. I'll touch it up.

Thanks! The first two lines were based on common phrases, Napoleon Blownapart and gone like Genghis Khan (often it's Kubla Khan but I've heard both). Then I ended up finishing ...

"Napoleon Blownapart" and "Gone like Genghis Khan" are somewhat common phrases, I thought. The real point of this poem is that it comes off totally tonally inappropriate, like Ozymandias rephrased ...

"There are places where I feel it in 6/8 and others I feel it in 4/4 and that's not a good sign for translation authority between lyricist and reader." Switching ...

I used "purity" since "virginity" in a poem sounded kind of goofy to me and this was inspired by this other thing that's "Virginity is Like a Rose" and then ...

Thanks!

This was supposed to be a bit jarring, but I think I might not have gotten it quite right. I could get away with more experimental things without turning into ...

Thanks. It's stylistically very unpolished and I know I need to work on that, but I'm glad some people like it since the first (but not only) reactions I got ...