Werthan

"When I was 11, I became diagnosed with Anorexia Nervosa and Depression all because of two words. " The more natural way to phrase this would be "got diagnosed", even ...

Make a song out of this. It sounds like most Christian songs I've heard, and you could use it for a contemporary hymn or a rock type song. If you ...

Don't live in the suburbs with a white picket fence, two children, and a dog then? You can negotiate more than this. I like the metaphors, but this is a ...

This was entertaining. I feel like walls talking would be creepy to be honest, especially if they were saying all that like they were voyeurs inhumanly watching for four years, ...

I like the flow of this. It reminds me of Japanese poetic styles somehow. There is also a very nice mix of happiness and melancholy as well, rather than just ...

This is nice and avant-garde. The scientific language clashes with the romantic content well and I feel like this actually plays into the rhythm in this case, and the same ...

This is good. I've gotten in a habit of being afraid to click front-page works to be honest, especially ones with ambiguous titles, which I see as being almost overused ...

I like how this doesn't really focus on their emotions at all, but that's the main thing you notice. It's like foreground-background and the poem itself is a background that ...

I like this metaphor, especially the "and i hope you'll drown with me," part. I would take out the strikethrough on the last line though, since I feel like you've ...

This reminded me of the Samuel Barber song St. Ita's Vision for some reason (I think it has to do with the poetic meter). If the use of spacing has ...

This is the first one of these I've read. I think I can infer what's going on. It was rather funny. It didn't even dwell that much on the few ...

The title is great, "Humans Who Hate Looking At Other Humans". The buildup is great, but I feel like the part where the title is mentioned is a bit anti-climactic ...

"Is a part of your family,." I would fix this punctuation mark. "The pitcher on your wall," Is this supposed to be picture? It could work as pitcher but that's ...

I think this reads like a diary entry combined with an essay in terms of formatting and subject matter. I do like the use of language though. And really, from ...

You blanked out your poem. Why did you blank it out? I was like "ooh, it's one of those white canvas avant garde type things, but in literary form! But ...