WaywardBird

Alright, so since you helped me out on my story, I get to help you out on yours. I picked the one with the least comments- here's me helping to ...

First off, I love your signature! Don't get me wrong- I love the story and the words, but the tempo felt too long. Loveeedd the imagry, but perhaps if we ...

ooohh, a noir poem! funnnn! The, uh, which one was it? The one towards the begining where you're telling about the foe striking again? That couplet is a little long ...

Okay, I clicked on this link because I knew it'd make me roll my eyes, but... Um? is this a joke? nonono, of course not, that was terribly rude of ...

Sorry! Had to hurry and could only read a quarter of it, but figure i might as well say something! 1. It's a bit direct. (id est, Ezekeil shouting "Don't ...

Now, what's the issue here? hmmm.... I'm going to comment as I read along, I don't want to miss anything. 1. More detail would be nice. As Isabella walks through ...

OMYGOD THIS IS THE FUNNIEST F*CKIN THING I'VE READ ALL DAY. you should create a twitter account and post them on there, you know, like recap the entire series. People ...

warning!Warning! this may be a biased opinion because of my personality and limited experiance Um... Are you a volenteer brain surgeon on the side too? Goodness gracious, it's not a ...

I'll level with you- not a big fan of the first stanza. It seems like something cliched. Let us explore, and call upon the terrific tool, Thesaurus. All the pros ...

Lol, son, I think you just wrote a poem embodying the teenage condition. Often times I find myself quoting the billion dollar rule: " Above all, to thine self be ...

oooooo. I'll level with you, the begining was boring. I personally think that little protagonist here is a fool for not seeing Mr. Drinkwater is a douche. But I stopped ...

I fail to see what happened in this story. Yes, the student was proven wrong by the teacher, yes, they are in a spaceship, yes, the socks are now purple... ...

I like the first half of it- I can totally see it. I picture a dusty space with sun too bright, scarlet glass that's baked to the asphalt, and a ...

While the tense is smart, and the setting is intriguing, I fail to see what just happened. Clearly this story has some background knowledge with it, but some people lack ...

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