Vivian

Oh my God I love this poem. ;) It's great Timmy. It's not that confusing and whether it makes sense or not is a matter of opinion. It has a ...

Now this has to continue, you left us hanging off a cliff. I love the story, it's great. Your idea seems so original and I just want to know where ...

Cool. I had originally planned to put something about a shooting star in there. :)

Thanks. I'll fix that mistake.

Thanks. I didn't know it was one word. :(

I agree with Audy, Writer, your sister's great at this.

Thanks, the changes are complete.

Thanks Lefty.

Thanks, I'll fix all the nitpicks and sorry I wasn't so detailed. All I remember is the trees and car outside my window, and this was my actual dream. Several ...

Woo!!! Great story. Your right about eternal and immortal being different things, if you look at the definitions carefully you can tell. Since everyone else pointed out your other mistakes' ...

I know how you feel. Dreams and sleep get me like that too. ~~ Love the poem, it has a nice flow of wonder and a bit of solemn regret. ...

Maybe "We're still standing in the rain", would work.

I think this should have been called "In My Arms, You Will Be Safe", just for the irony of it.

Viv here. Anna, it was a good poem and it did make me laugh. It may be a total mess, but I don't think you have any problems. Though you ...

I think it's fine without the stanza's.