Virgil

So, I like the way you end your chapters, I felt more submerged this time around, since I'm getting used to this world. Anyway, I still don't know if I ...

Agh, the info dumps. Like what Flite said, there's no excuse for the info dumps, you could've done something like, added it in with sprinkles of sugar instead of giving ...

This actually isn't a bad prologue from what I see, though, I wouldn't call it a prologue, people have the tendency to skip over these types of things and if ...

I liked how you didn't info dump it to show that he can use magic, what a good and intriguing start that pulled me in my the time he cut ...

I have a review for you today, it's me, Atsmai! Let's begin. I actually liked this more than I expected once I got into it and stopped closing the window ...

I like the story, I like how realistic it is, this could all be real, and I give props to you for not making them sound monotone in my head, ...

I'm here to review for you, it's me, Atsmai! I know you said this was the worst thing you've ever written, but for your worst, this is pretty good. The ...

Alright, I'm here to review this, because, why not! You hooked me in with the first sentence, which is good. I liked this, even though you called it last minute ...

I found the prologue now xD. So, let's begin. I'm still loving your descriptions, I just love how mysterious they are, I have a thing for darker things, so, I ...

Well this is interesting. I usually don't like fancy words, but that's just me, to start off with, I'm sure we'll find out what they mean later in the story, ...

Alright, I'm reviewing by the chapter. First thing, I love that you made your character think about pee, wonder if Arianna likes facial hair, because it shows a lot of ...

So, it all takes place on the school bus? I think I like that, because something so simple can show such a story, I hope we stay on the school ...

I like how unique you are is the first thing I have to say, I read through the story and just, it feels different from other stories. I think I ...

Alright, Atsmai here to review, let's begin. I like the idea that talent without discipline gets you no where, you have to learn how to control your talent, and you ...

Alright, here we go. There are some grammar errors, which makes it harder to read. I don't think "Oh god." is necessary, because, I don't think they had any belief ...