VioletJune

It was OK, and I liked it, but it felt like a kid wrote it, like you didn't know how to explain everything in the write way.

I liked it but it was a little rough, it seemed like you repeated ideas over and over.

Oh my God this is so sad :( I feel like crying but that's a good thing because that means your that good of a writer haha, nice work.

Wow! Pure geinus lol. I loved it and was laughing really hard near the end because that's happened to me :?

Hahahahah you're a genius, I am in awe of your raw brilliancy. *Gets down and bows*

I really want to know how old Jared is haha, because as soon as I started reading it i got the impression he was in fourth or fifth grade but ...

Very interesting plot but I found that you repeated ideas a lot, just try to rephrase a few things and you should be fine.

Yes haha I want more too, I like how robbing the jewelry store or whatever doesn't freak her out but she is kinda consumed by the bacteria and grim from ...

This poem seems really perfect to me, all the symbolism you used matched up exactly to what you were describing and I didn't want it to end :)

I think you really used your imagination on this piece, it flows pretty smoothly and is an entertaining read I only found a couple typos, nice work.

Hmmm I guess around fouteen and up? Lol I'm not sure.

Haha ah man you are really funny, like you seriously just brightened my day. I don't like when people just tell you things like good job! Love your writing! Your ...

I like it! Ha ha i think it's cute and I want to read more :)

Yes, the Taylor Swift lyrics did make it kinda cheesy but I've seen this happen to people I know hundreds of times and I like the way you portrayed the ...

Thanks ha ha I appreciate your comments :)