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Great first part. I will try my best to point out some aspects that I think could be improved upon. I noticed that throughout the chapter the narration either intentionally ...

Good job on the story. I have read the first chapter and there are a few aspects in the presentation of the story that I was a little unsure about. ...

I want to start off with saying that I have liked the melancholy tone that is kept throughout the poem. I also got the feeling of what the character is ...

I must agree that for its size this poem has a large impact. The only aspect of this poem that I did not particularly like is that to me, it ...

Interesting and engaging story. It would serve great as a prologue. I am a little confused about the structure of the "house" and the part where she jumped over a ...

I enjoyed reading this story. There are, however, a few aspects of the story that, in my opinion, could be improved. The story is told from a perspective of a ...

A nice, concise and interesting work. It reminded me of my Psychology class and the labs involved with it. The set up is very simplistic but also very effective and ...

I enjoyed your story. It was well executed and as far as I can tell the grammar is good. The only misspelling that I noticed is " it true boot ...

First of all good start. Like the reviewer above noted first two paragraphs feel too descriptive for the first few sentences of the story. You need to start with some ...

Pretty funny. I had a thing against squirrels back in high school. Overall, short and interesting. I understand that this piece was just for fun so I will just point ...

I liked the use of words. The first two paragraphs, especially the first, lack adjectives; somehow the sentences do not seem to flow but rather feel tagged on to each ...

I enjoy fantasy novels directed towards young adults and kids. The Lost Years of Merlin was a gem that I found at a local library. The book is very well ...

I really enjoyed the story. The way you painted the images with words is beautiful. My only suggestion would be to change the last sentences. You see, Cassidy had pushed ...

I liked the central idea of the story. I do agree with the review above that the first half of the story was more engaging. The reason for this, I ...